Revise the first body paragraph according to feedback I provided and work the second body paragraph
Body Paragraph 1
Topic Sentence [ Very general, connect to thesis]
Major Support 1 (Directly hold up the idea in the topic sentence) (1)
Minor support (Data, explanation, quotes) (2)
Major support 2 (1)
Minor support 1 (2)
Conclusion/ wrap-up
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Body Paragraph 2
Topic Sentence [ Very general, connect to thesis]
Major Support 1 (Directly hold up the idea in the topic sentence) (1)
Minor support (Data, explanation, quotes) (2)
Major support 2 (1)
Minor support 1 (2)
Conclusion/ wrap-up